Friday, March 9, 2012

Rate these freestyle bars on 1-10 (PLEASE)?

I posted this earlier, but more people are online now

one being the worst, ten being the best: rate it 1-10



I came up with these randomly. three seperate sets of bars. Imma finish the best one:



Bars#1:

There aint no such thing as bad people

just mistakes

dont get me wrong there can be snakes

karma works slow on them

but, dont worry that Bych will be controllin them

givin them what she owes them

like ????? (tryin to come up with a similie)



Bar set 2: So if life's a bit*h

and Karma is too

are they freinds, are they cool

or at each othes necks

can't wait to wreck each other's plans

is that sh*t scams, or 100% real? (unfinished)



Bar set 3: Is it possible

that life is just an illusion, the maya

and things become clearer when you get

higher and higher

finally, you'll come back dowh

don't remember what you heard or sound

or what you found... out

mind's headed south (unfinished)



which one should i finish, or should i give it up? be as blunt as you want. i need the truth if i suck. anything i can improve on? any tips



I've only wrote like 6 verses EVER, so yeah, im prety new to thisRate these freestyle bars on 1-10 (PLEASE)?
Im personally thinking a 5. aint good aint bad. Lacks thought. I personally wouldnt post anything unfinished. If it WERE amazing, someone could tkae it and make it their own. next thing you know. Boom. Your stuff stolen. I think you have potential. I like where your heads at with the idea. karmas not often enough talked about, and I think with some work, you could possibly write some good stuff. Might be more of a freestyle/spoken word poet, then a mc, but alot of those are interchangeable. For a good example of what your trying to do check out Saul Williams. Id keep at it man. even the bluntness of people on here shouldnt kill your dream if you want to write.
7/10Rate these freestyle bars on 1-10 (PLEASE)?
4/10...rhymed them to them 4 times to itself..



and like the guy above, it kind of lacks thought.
ill give you a 5
its k i guess

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